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Post: 4340500_76 created on Sat, 18 Dec 2004 03:53:39 +0000
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Judging "Ode to Timed Test," by ranjir
--[ Style ] Poetic style generally can be divided into two distinct categories: known; unique. Some do fall somewhere in between. This piece is a much-used and accepted style which in no way detracts from the work itself. When using such a method, strengths must be looked for in other areas, such as word usage. (3 - Fair)

--[ Narrative ] The poem tells a story that many of us can relate to, all having - at one time or another- taken a timed test. There is no doubt how the writer was affected by the circumstances, but I do find his word choices could have been better to make a stronger impression.(2 - Fair)

--[ Characters ] This was a one-person narrative describing mood and reaction. The same applies here as with Narrative, the words could have been stronger and more definitive.(2 - Fair)

--[ Grammar & Punctuation ] Punctuation in poetry is always a matter of interpretation, but in this case I will point out the flaws I see. Use one exclamation point. Use elipses points instead of two dashes, and the word ?Time!!? At the end is too glaring to have been ?way off in the distance?. 2- Fair)

--[ Plot | Originality ] I found the plot to be a good one, with plays on emotion. Tension and an abrupt ending can certainly be affective. ( 4 - Above Average

--[ Overall ] While I did enjoy this poem, I would have been more impressed with a few word changes to more clearly define the story. Thank you for the background, I can just see all of that.(3 - Average)

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Post: 4340500_80 created on Sat, 18 Dec 2004 04:16:39 +0000
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Judging "Ode to Timed Test," by ranjir
--[ Overall ] I can't say much about this. It's too much of a poem for me. Minimalism seems to work here, but I'm not nearly expert enough to give any kind of worthwhile comments. Mahayr's opinion will have to carry this one. (3 - Average)

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Post: 4340500_81 created on Sat, 18 Dec 2004 04:18:03 +0000
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Judging "Inside," by John W Wells
--[ Style ] This had me guessing for a while. I much enjoyed this piece. The broken English fit very well. (4 - Above Average)

--[ Narrative ] The narration was mostly inhuman, as it should be. The lack of indication when the voice changes is good. It keeps the reader right there. (4 - Above Average)

--[ Characters ] Believable and consistent. It's interesting to see the author put himself so far outside of himself with this piece. (4 - Above Average)

--[ Grammar & Punctuation ] Punctuation and grammar are decent, considering who the narrator is. Spelling is also good, except for a misplaced "it" in "design a bit". (3 - Average)

--[ Plot | Originality ] The originality is strong with this one. And it's fun to read because it keeps you guessing. (4 - Above Average)

--[ Overall ] I had a lot of fun with this. (4 - Above Average)

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Post: 4340500_82 created on Sat, 18 Dec 2004 04:19:14 +0000
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Judging "Today I Died For It," by Enadariel
--[ Overall ] My strong personal feelings about this subject can not allow me to review this piece objectively. Mahayr's review will have to carry it. (4 - Above Average)

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Post: 4340500_83 created on Sat, 18 Dec 2004 05:53:37 +0000
Posted: Sat, 18 Dec 2004 05:53:37 +0000

Whoops... I posted my review of Mytyl's "Only Once" twice... The irony is chewing me up inside, I swear.

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Post: 4340500_85 created on Sun, 19 Dec 2004 00:52:29 +0000
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Woohoo! Thanks so much! smile

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Post: 4340500_86 created on Tue, 21 Dec 2004 23:32:15 +0000
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You're very welcome.

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Post: 4340500_87 created on Tue, 08 Mar 2005 07:49:16 +0000
Posted: Tue, 08 Mar 2005 07:49:16 +0000

when does the second contest start up?

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