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Im making a sub series of gungrave where brandon isnt the main character. A kid he took under his wing will the main char. Angel is the main char. i need ideas for the story i have alot of it but ight now im stuck on what to do. Any thing would help out.

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Well maybe you can tell us all that you know now so that we can have some sort of way to start.

That sounds like a cool idea. It'll be like Gungrave 1/2. I'll let you know if anything comes to mind.

Why would Angel have the strength to take down five grown men but he becomes a hitman? Shouldn't there be more story on his strength? It would be more realistic if Angel has a lot of courage and heart and fought the men with all his strength and he takes down like one or two of them, then Brandon shows up and helps him. With it being like that, Angel would have more room to grow.
But that's just me.

I understand completely. You can keep in mind what I wrote up there because I felt like I was in the zone! O.O
(and, no I wasn't high) >_>

Some questions and then some of my opinions:

Questions:

1. Is this going to be a story that you'll be posting here, on another site, or plan to publish some day with the authorization of Yasuhiro Nightow and his affiliates?

2. Have you decided on a title yet?


My opinions:

1. Get rid of the name Angel. It is far overused and also a cliche in this situation. Person named Angel going around and performing the sin of killing people. Been done. Many times.

2. I think the main character's ties with Brandon, Bunji, and the rest of the gang should be a bare minimum. I think the story, seeing that it is a sub-series featuring a new character, should focus around the new character. Make the story so it's like, "While the main characters in the main series where doing this, this guy had a world of his own troubles to take care of" and have it were the character 'knows' Brandon and Bunji, and might possibly talk with them a bit, but wouldn't exactly call eachother friends (I also say this because adding another member to the two-man team would ruin the brotherly image of Brandon and Bunji in my opinion).

3. As for looking like Brandon, I think not. What I think would be a good storyline idea would be that Brandon notices that his eyes are much like Harry's, filled with the want for power (which will be true, once he joins Millenion). So throughout the series, Brandon tries to have Angel quit Millenion, so Harry will be able to gain power unopposed. The difference between Harry and Angel is that, while Harry tried to gain power by crawling the ladder through the organization by intlligence, Angel will attempt this by getting stronger, with constant body modifications (not necrolization) performed by Dr. Tokioka, which also acted as experiments leading up to his perfection of the necrolization process.

4. Work a little bit more on using the Shift key and your grammer, since whenever someone says that they'll be writing something big, people often check to see how well they write in their posts. No need to concentrate on this immensely, but just think about it.


Now, you don't have to listen to everything I wrote here. These are just my opinions on the idea. You can either consider what I've said and do it, or you can brush it off if you don't think it'll workout for you.

I agree with everything given I was for the most part going to say most of that. Also seriously change Angel to something else. Maybe a more Roman name or something.