Lhia_Dunwaith
I can relate. Very much, in fact. (Except for the whole emo-ness.) I've always wanted to fly. What's the apology for? It's a great poem, and just because it's short doesn't mean it's not good!
Thank you *hug* That was very nice of you. I guess i was still emo as I posted it but I'm happy now xD I've always wanted to fly too, but my first attempt ended in... actually I was okay but it could have been broken leg
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have you ever dreamed of flying?
i have had recurring dreams that i could hold a talisman and fly by its power.
what was interesting was that i was not stretched out lengthwise like Superman, but standing straight up, yet moving through the air.
it seems this is something with which many of us can identify.
Wow... I see. I haven't ever dreamt of flying like that but that could be cool. Thank you so much
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Wow.. i read this and i was amazed.. i can relate to this, emo-ness and everything sadly.. my lifes dream is to fly.. i would do anything for one chance y'know?
Sniff, thnak you so much; I'm sorry oyu can relate to the emoness but I'm very happy you like my poem
heart I'd love ot fly too, maybe one day in life, humans will be able too. Check tihs out, I'm trying to force humans to evolve wings by flapping my should/backbone, I'm double jointed by the way so I can) so in 500000000000000 years time we may be able to fly.... errrr yeah.... why do I even bother?
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The whole poem is great the way it is or the first stanza could stand on its own as a sort of nature heightened awareness sort of thing or like realizing how small humans are in the great universe. "My hair whips out behind me
Like a wave of murky water touching the stars. " Beautiful.
I love oyu loads! I really got happy reading this! I love how you've interpreted this and spotted tihngs i didn't
sweatdrop Thank you so much
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I really like that; very emotional and easy to relate to.
Just one thing...
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The choice is mine own
I think that line would flow better if it were changed to The choice is my own.
Why thank you
heart Yep, I'll change that. Sorry it's just a regional dialect in where I live, we tend to say mine own a lot. I'll change it late *hugs*
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Whoa... great poem! When I read it, all the way through it I was getting chills. You are an awesome writer!
Seriously? Why thank you so much *hugs to death* Sorry about giving you the chills though
sweatdrop I got them writing it too
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