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 Posted: Wed Jan 16, 2008 6:52 pm
I'm not a poet. At school one day this just popped into my head so I wrote it down, and now I am posting it here.
Above, the sky is black
and the winds that blow are strong
Tension rises within us all
We know the day of darkness has come
Those who dwell in the light will meet their demise
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Posted: Mon Feb 11, 2008 3:46 pm
For not being a poet, it's a good start. Yes, it needs work, but hey, you weren't trying to create a masterpiece or anything. Keep it up, try adding more imagery rather than just spitting out sentences that summarize. Try to work on your flow.
Good luck!
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