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Yo, its me. I love to write and i've started a number of story's; im just gonna post a sample of one and would LOVE some feed back.
Like: Its s**t: its awesome: you could do something better: and so on.


Oh, and there is a bit to read, so if you dont have the time dont bother. ^_^


Daniel F Rock woke up to a normal day. He got up had breakfast brushed teeth, you know the normal stuff. Daniel was in his 50’s he was balding. Farley tall and couldn’t be missed in a crowd. He also had a scar from his eye down to his mouth. Daniel was on old man, and had seen too much in his lifetime. He worked as a securest servus officer. He had been John Kennedy’s securest servus main man. Once the American president died that ended Daniel’s currier. He had been right behind the president as he died. Daniel sore the look on everyone’s faces, and remembers every second of it. Daniel remembers when people checked if he was alive, but Daniel new once that bullet hit the president, he was dead. It hunted Daniel night and day. Daniel had moved on from that day with the help of his loving wife and two kids.
So, Daniel did all the house hold stuff he did before he went for his morning jog. As he left everyday he would go up to his two kids bedrooms and kiss them on there foreheads. Then go to his wife and say how much he loved her, and then left for his jog. But this was a day Daniel would never forget. He got out; the air was cool on Daniel’s face as he stared running. Daniel ran for as long as he could, and once he couldn’t run anymore, he went to a jog then go down to a power walk. Since it was kind of cold out, Daniel lost his breath faster and when he was walking he had to end up sitting down so he could breath easier. He stoped in a park. Hardly anyone was up at this time. Daniel sat down on a bench. He looked around. Something in the busses caught his eye. It was shinny. Then a red light came out from it. At first Daniel thought he may just be seeing things, but once he focused his eyes on the red thing, he understood what it was. Daniel dived to the left as an eruption off bullets pursed though the bench that he had been sitting on. Daniel got up off the ground and ran, he ran for his life.
The red thing that Daniel had seen was a red laser pinned right in the middled of his forehead. It was connected to a gun. As Daniel ran he heard someone shout and then he heard the person say to other people around, no dought the others with guns to split up. Daniel ran as fast as he had ran in years. Daniel thought of running home to get his family out, but then he thought that he could just lead them to his family. So, Daniel went 50-50. He didn’t know if he had made the right or wrong desertion.
Daniel reached into his pocket and pulled out a cell. He rang his family. He kept running as he herd the ringing go for a bit. Then to his relief his wife picked up the phone. “Hello?” she said kind of shaky
“You have to get out!! Get to the police!! There are bad people after me right now, you have to run-”
“Dear, there here, I love yo-” Daniel’s wife was cut off by a mans voice.
“Good morning Daniel Rock” the mans voice was calm
“If you lay a ******** god damn fingere on her, ill ******** hunt you down and rip your god damn head off!!” Daniel bellowed into his cell. Daniel ducked a hail off bullets and dashed into a side alleyway, and headed for a flight of stars at the end.
“Ahh, calm down Daniel. All I want is your head, if you give me that, I won’t harm your family” the man said
“You might just get it in a ******** second!!” Daniel shouted as he ran up the stares. They lead up to the roof of an apartment flats. “Oh, is someone all ready shooting at you?” the man laughed “if they get me, let my family go!” Daniel said as he reached the top of the stares and looked down at about 10 armed people started climbing the stares. “They are not my men, if they get you before me, your family will end up like you” the man snarled
“What the ********!!!” Daniel said as he ran full pelt at the side off the roof top. Just as he leapt off the room the 10 armed people got to the top and fired. Daniel felt like he was flying, then BANG! He hit the other roof. He got up and kept running. “So what you’re saying is that I got to get home, before I die? And when I get there, I die anyway?” Daniel asked and leapt to another roof. The roofs in the suberde Daniel was in where tight together so he could jump from one to another, but Daniel new there was one, which he may not make. “Yes, but, if you get killed out there, your family goes down, if u survive, your family lives but you still die” the man said “you have until 10:30 tomorrow” then he man hung up on Daniel. Daniel new he only really had one option, make it back home. He loved his family too much, and would die for them. So, Daniel kept on running. Leap after leap Daniel new he was getting one step closer. Daniel was beginning to become tired, but he only made each leap with no room to spare. Daniel also new that these jumps were no wear near how big the last jump would have to be. Daniel new once he jumped the flats that had a little garden up the top he only had 2 more jumps until he had to lunch himself of the last roof. No matter what, this was going to be Daniel’s last roof. He got up to the garden flat, and as he jumped someone fired at him; and got him right through his left shoulder. Daniel did not scream in pain nor winch a bit. He did not even notes it, all he was thinking about was the last jump and keeping his family alive. He kept on running, the second last jump came, Daniel made it with ease. But now was the time, his time. He would either live or die. Daniel sprinted at the roof. No turning back now!! He thought as he leapt. He felt himself soaring through the air. He felt like there was nothing holding him back. He held out his hands to catch the other side. He was lucky his arms where long otherwise he would have not made it. Daniel caught the side, and I mean the SIDE of the flat roof. But, unfortunately for Daniel he only managed to grad it with his left hand. As he did so and his body fell down he felt the wound. He still did not scream or yell in pain in stead he bit his bottom lip and put up with it. It was unbearable of course, but Daniel did not care, he had to save his family.
You see, if you know you have to save someone you love and would die for you seem to get, how do you say, special powers. It may not be a huge amount of power, but just enough to keep you going. And Daniel had just enough power to pull himself up onto the roof and get away to save his family. Also, some of the people who had been chasing him trued to jump the gap; they did not make it like Daniel. Instead 3 of the men plummeted to the ground and, well, they died in a way that would be horrible. It would be horrible because just before you hit the ground you know, you’re going to die and the last thing you see is your grave.
Daniel got to his house at 10:00am. Lucky he did as well. He burse through the doors, to see his family. They were all crying, and they shouted for him to get out. Daniel didn’t get to walk and say goodbye, because as he walked into that room he sore his grave. He sore the man who was going to kill him and the last words he said, well he shouted them so that anyone who could and would and was listening would hear him. “There are 8 of us!! 5 A’s, 2 C’s and an S!!!” then, Daniel went to his grave.
The man who killed Daniel got out a blade, and with one swing cut Daniel’s head from his shoulders. Then looked at the family and smiled. “If that was a message, we only need one messenger” he looked at Daniel’s wife, pointed a finger at her and one of Daniel’s two kids. Then there were 4 gun shots, then silence. Only one child survived, but that one child lives in a nut house. Only because he kept on babbling about the 5 A’s, 2 C’s and the S.


Thats not the end by the way: ^_^

Oh, and i havn't proff read it or anything, so the grammer and spelling is probabily really bad..>.<

Well, consitering that's not even the start, i just randomly picked out the smallest chapter thing...so to me; that's not much at all ^_^

It's cool. Lazy is cool ^_^
There r otha peoplez out there, out there in the world...some where (looking of into the distance with wishful eyes)