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 Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 8:05 am
Nevermore
I always thought I'd be alone,
Nobody to be at my side,
Until she said yes and lifted my soul,
I will be lonely
Nevermore.
Our years together were pure bliss,
My own heaven all for me,
She was truly my sweet angel,
I will feel sorrow
Nevermore.
She kept leaving for somewhere else,
I kept asking her to where,
She asked that I please stop asking,
I will ask her
Nevermore.
My career kept me away from home,
I was afraid she would feel alone,
She said she would find something to kill time,
I will worry
Nevermore.
In our laundry I found something,
A tie I've never seen before,
I asked her and she said it's nothing,
I will trust her
Nevermore.
I came home and my heart split open,
Her and another in loves sweet throes,
My eyes and mind were fury-blinded,
Now they feel
Nevermore.
I screamed in sorrow and in anger,
My love was empty all these years,
The blood-stained knife was looking friendly,
I wanted pain
Nevermore.
The blade found its way to my heart,
Just as she had done before,
The world turned black with streaks of scarlet,
I was released
Forevermore.
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Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 4:53 pm
Somehow this poem strikes me as alike to Edgar Allen Poe's poetry. I think the repetition created this effect. Good job on it Sean, you managed to impress and depress me at the same time.
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Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 11:46 pm
Ah.. I think I'd have to agree with The Grey Blade..
[[I really need to learn your names haha..]]
It was very.. Gloomy.. But I understand his feelings and actions perfectly..
It was very good though, I'd like to read more of your work.. =]
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Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 5:17 pm
Spirit is Sean, and I'm Joe, if you remember.
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