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Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 8:29 pm

This is something I wrote awhile ago

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They say that she’s funny
And sweeter than honey
They say she’s so loud
Yet always brings the crowd
They say she’s constantly crazy
But I wonder if that’s all they see
Do they ever hear the insecurity in her screams
Do they ever think she’s not as she seems
This girl, they will never find
As they search for her heart so blind
Sadly, all she can do is hide
Hide behind her well plastered smile
That smile that would’ve died
If it had not been for her will to entertain
She would’ve been the person behind you in the driving lane
The lane of not understanding you only know a lie
The endless twists and turns leaving you wanting to die
In the end not caring what’s going to happen
Ready to commit that fatal sin
Unable to cry you finally say goodbye
You suddenly wishing you weren’t blind, right before you die

So, what do you think? Please be honest. sweatdrop lol

Posted: Mon Jul 13, 2009 3:49 pm

OMG I LOVE IT!!!! ^^ 10/10 hehe im not to good at rhyming poems so this was soo good. its deep yet simple to understand heart

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Posted: Mon Jul 13, 2009 4:40 pm

eek Omg thanks!!! lol

Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 7:11 pm

I get it but It's off you leak out stuff you shouldn't you ramble on and on so yeah"

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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 8:18 pm

I got it! Your poem is not down to earth your poem is hanging in the air... by it's toe nails stare sorry but your not that down to earth in poetry is not your alley.

Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 10:28 pm

;-; *goes off in a corner and cries* Ok, I didnt expect it to be hated that much, I know writing isnt my best skill but holy crap!! lol

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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 6:47 am

lylatay

;-; *goes off in a corner and cries* Ok, I didnt expect it to be hated that much, I know writing isnt my best skill but holy crap!! lol

It's constructive criticism Dear Use it

Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 11:50 am

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lylatay

;-; *goes off in a corner and cries* Ok, I didnt expect it to be hated that much, I know writing isnt my best skill but holy crap!! lol

It's constructive criticism Dear Use it

I just didnt expect a you should give up type attitude tho >.< lol

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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 11:23 am

lol but i thought it was good! heart
how long did u take to write it?

Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 8:38 pm

Thanks Meta and it only took me a little bit, I sit and write whats on my mind and then leave it alone ^^" So it didnt even take a half hour

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Posted: Wed Nov 04, 2009 5:41 pm

lylatay

This is something I wrote awhile ago

Blind

They say that she’s funny
And sweeter than honey
They say she’s so loud
Yet always brings the crowd
They say she’s constantly crazy
But I wonder if that’s all they see
Do they ever hear the insecurity in her screams
Do they ever think she’s not as she seems
This girl, they will never find
As they search for her heart so blind
Sadly, all she can do is hide
Hide behind her well plastered smile
That smile that would’ve died
If it had not been for her will to entertain
She would’ve been the person behind you in the driving lane
The lane of not understanding you only know a lie
The endless twists and turns leaving you wanting to die
In the end not caring what’s going to happen
Ready to commit that fatal sin
Unable to cry you finally say goodbye
You suddenly wishing you weren’t blind, right before you die

So, what do you think? Please be honest. sweatdrop lol

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