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Posted: Thu Sep 24, 2009 11:01 pm
INFORMATION Name: Niveya Age: 24 Sex: Female Orientation: Bisexual Physical Description: Niveya has long black hair that reaches down to about her shoulder blades. Her hair keeps a natural wave to it at all times which she really hates because of the unruliness that comes with it after washing it. Her skin is a dark tan from being out in the sun too much. Her eyes are a lovely green that looks a lot like the color of grass right after a spring rain. Her eye brows are the same black as her hair and rather thin, despite the black color. Her nose is small and slightly freckled. While her lips are of medium fullness not but not so huge they take up her whole face. Her neck is slender as are her shoulders. Her arms are thin with a bit of muscle from lifting boxes of fish when her father would allow her to help. Her breasts are small but firm and despite their size she is still proud of them. Her stomach is flat with none of those unsightly love handles. She has a bit of muscle to her abbs but not enough to show. Her hips make out the finishing touch to her hour glas form. Her thighs and calves are all muscle from the long runs she makes on the beach. Her feet are rather big for a girls, one of her only features of her body she truly hates. Her toes are very long and when she goes barefoot she uses them a lot to pick up items dropped on the floor.
Her wardrobe is a simple thing to compose in the morning. She normally will wear a bikini top and a pair of short pants. Because she is embarrassed of her feet she will often wear a pair of boots. However on the small occasions that such a wardrobe doesn't work she will put on a simple but pretty dress and wear her hair back in a bun that usually won't hold longer than a hour or two. On the rare times that it gets cold she'll take to wearing the thick wherhide shirts and pants. Personality: Niveya is a warmhearted and polite young lady to just about everyone. Just don't let her rant or you'll hear her real feelings. She keeps everything bottled up inside and avoids confrontations as much as she can as her fighting skills are not great and her come backs to name calling sucks. Her moods go up and down like a dragons wings during flight. Any problem she has she chews on until there's nothing left to chew however any stranger who met her during this time would never know she had a problem by the smile she'd put on her face to keep them from seeing it.
The flute and art are her two releases. She enjoys drawing the flits and the other dragons that populate the Weyr. Every now and then she will draw people to make a few marks but that's not very often. The flute she plays like there's no tommorrow and even carries it wherever she goes in a little pouch attached to her belt. She knows a fair amount of Harper ballads and even likes to make up her own songs from time to time.
When she's not playing a song or drawing something she loves to swim but she's particular. She hates having her head under water. She's not really afraid but the feeling that comes from putting her whole head under causes her to panic and rush for the surface. Despite this she loves playing in the waves and floating on top of the water.
Niveya's thoughts on relationships is she's better off without them. In her mind boys are only after one thing and that one thing she doesn't give out easily. She keeps a real suspision about boys. She always suspects them to be either making fun of her behind her back or checking her out which irks her to no end and makes her feel more like a piece of meat or a spectical for them to laugh at. History: Niveya was born the youngest of three to a fisherman of Ista Hold and his wife. Her two older brothers took a really well liking to her as a baby and as she grew into a little girl. She could always count on them to be there for her however as she grew older and her brothers too, her brothers soon found the crafts they wanted to expand in and wnet off to learn all they could from masters of those crafts in different holds. With her brothers gone Niveya was left to fend for herself against the other children of Ista hold. The other children didn't like Niveya as much as she thought they did and with her brothers gone the other children showed their true colors. They became cruel and mean always teasing her for something or calling her names. All the cruelty the children showed her changed her completely. Before when her brothers could protect her she was always happy and spoke what was on her mind and in her heart to everyone. She was never shy to show her talents and share them but after her brother were gone for a while her whole attitude changed. Her happiness was scarce and she shared little of what was on her mind or in her heart with anyone.
As she got into her pre-teens her mother began requesting more of her time helping in the holds kitchen serving klah to those who requested it. When she wasn't helping in the kitchen she would try to help her father on the docks when he was not out on the water with his crew. When she couldn't do that and she still had free time she would usually go out to the beach and walk for hours just checking out the scenery of the land and watching the waves. Not long after her seventeenth birthday a search rider came to the hold and called her out to be searched to become a candidate for Ista Weyr's upcoming hatching. The chance to get away from all those that taunted her was irrisistable and she immediately accepted. Pets: None Other/Talents: Very good flute player, fair artist, fair swimmer, fast runner, good singer, can make good klah, and a rather good storyteller. Picture: N/A Igen or Ista???: Ista
DRAGON INFORMATION Name: Javareth Color: Blue Physical Description: Having a hard time making up a good design for him Personality: Javareth is a calm and caring dragon. He is very observative to his surroundings and a good choice of character. He's polite to those polite to him but only speaks when spoken to. He's a good motivator to his rider and knows just what to say to quell her worries. He enjoys music and even dances when he and his rider are in private.
He loves water and any free moment he has he'll either swim in the nearest body of water or lay on the shore and sun while watching the clouds float by in there reflection of the water.
When it comes to females he pays little attention to them even at rising. The only way he'll go up is if his rider really encourages him and she has to do a lot of encouraging before he'll even ponder on it.
Javareth's true passion is flying. Level flying or aerial tricks for fun he loves it all. He'd stay in the air all the time if he could. In the air is where he wants to be, away from everyone and everything but the clouds and his rider. Other:
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Posted: Fri Sep 25, 2009 5:09 am
There are a lot of little details that you include - quirks, if you will - that make Niveya more believable as a character, and I appreciate them. However, there are some things in her history that I don't quite understand, the first thing being why, exactly, the children of Ista dislike her so strenuously. She seems like she was a personable child up to that point.
With Javareth, I feel that his personality could use more fleshing out. Right now he doesn't really seem to have any faults, or even personality except that he backs his bondmate up in every respect. I'd also like to know more about how and when Impression occurred, and what Niveya and Javareth have been doing since then. There's a lot of time between seventeen and twenty four in which all sorts of interesting things could happen.
I do like the idea of a dragon dancing.
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Posted: Sat Sep 26, 2009 7:08 am
^^ In general, I like it! My points are the same as Fey's really, and in addition there's this:
Her feet are rather for a girls, one of her only features of her body she trully hates.
^^ Just a missed word there and a misspelling, no big deal but I thought I'd mention it.
As for fleshing out the dragon, here a few ideas about what it might be good to add? Feel free to ignore if you don't like them <3
- How well does he take orders? Does he have a lot of respect for the big dragons? - Any particular reason he's quiet? Does that relate to him liking to sit back and observe the situation? - With regards to him liking to get away from others, is this just because he prefers the company of his rider or does he dislike most others, do they make him nervous? - Speaking of, does he have any fears?
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