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 Posted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 2:20 pm
 If you want to know how to improve your posts. Put a example of your roleplaying onto this thread. Other members can give you advice on how to improve.
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Posted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 3:43 pm
Hell syndrone   Ami
"now I'm the bad guy here, I mean I am but....it's okay villains don't cry they just grow up a bit more" Ami said pointing a gun at the face of someone who owed him money. Ami smiled and pushed his gun into the face of the young girl, who didn't even seem scared. It's a curse of living here fear is not aloud to be show or someone could just eat you up, like me. He pulled the trigger sending a bullet to the other side of her head. She hit the ground with a thud, blood leaked onto the ground, "and this is where your live ends in an alley with trash and mud" Ami whispered. He slipped the gun into his hoodie pocket, and walked away from the body. Weird thing is there no one to clean them up, the bodys that is, so seeing a dead person was just another normal thing.
just color , me gray for now so what do you people out there think
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Posted: Sun Nov 01, 2009 3:14 am
Hell syndrone Hell syndrone Ami
"now I'm the bad guy here, I mean I am but....it's okay villains don't cry they just grow up a bit more" Ami said pointing a gun at the face of someone who owed him money. Ami smiled and pushed his gun into the face of the young girl, who didn't even seem scared. It's a curse of living here fear is not aloud to be show or someone could just eat you up, like me. He pulled the trigger sending a bullet to the other side of her head. She hit the ground with a thud, blood leaked onto the ground, "and this is where your live ends in an alley with trash and mud" Ami whispered. He slipped the gun into his hoodie pocket, and walked away from the body. Weird thing is there no one to clean them up, the bodys that is, so seeing a dead person was just another normal thing.
just color , me gray for now so what do you people out there think Good length wise, keep an eye on grammar though, good descriptions, you’re definitely better than my pupil! ((I'm tutoring one of my friends, it's not so successful, so I'm looking about to see how other people do the teaching))
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Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2009 4:42 pm
Ami
Ami heard two shot off some where out the city's, great not only am I walking wearing a top hat, there is shooting close enough to where I could hear it. What a charming city, I'd never thought that it would turn out so.... interesting to say the least. With all the money I've made over the years I should have bought a house out here, instead of staying in the hotels, motels, and what I hope was not whore houses. But I'm not here enough for any of that nonsense, I hate going to the bank as it is. Still it would be nice to have a place of my own, just to call it that at least.
Ami walked for what seemed hours, which was only about half of one. The street grew from clean, to dirty, to disgusting, back to dirty, then clean once more. The buildings did the same but only appeared to be home's and burned out warehouses. Ami was not the type to bother those who are at home. Unless there skill set called for it, which didn't come often. He finely reached something that could of been a garage. "oh goodie bond to be an person of skill to help... well as far as getting my bike-ish thing out of it's depressing dwellings" Ami said to no one but him self. He walked over with his normally goof steps, and looked around for a door way of some sort. He began to knock on what he hope was a door way but couldn't truly be so sure.
just color , me gray for now new thing like did this maybe two second ago in an steampunk rp
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 2:45 pm
How about for those of us who don't really like having a flashy post, grammar I will of course be consistant over, but as for colors and pictures when I post generally I leave such things out. I could possibly do a picture with every post, but I was just wondering if it really is needed.
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 3:44 pm
You don't have to. Just some people do it so others can have a general idea of what their character is.
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 3:50 pm
@Lord Maxdom, if you qoute your last post, colours and pictures are eassy, there are even some people who will help you get your first layout. Colours and pictures, although not always nessisary, help people remeber your character and give you a higher likely hood of being role played with. ((people will pick you out as who they want to talk to))
@Hell syndrone great charachter development, very visual, all over good post!!
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 5:13 pm
this was my first ever RP post about 6 months ago  I will ease the tide and bring the calmA Night of Reflection
He walked out of the city with a clear, determined mind. The breeze brushed softly across his face as he surveyed the dark night sky. It was a perfect evening for a hunt.
He learned over the course of years that the best place to hunt was none other than the forest of his origins. Many small villages of humans resided here and in the forest his acts could go unnoticed. No one to watch, no one to ruin the cover he had recently built in the city. It also made the task of hunting a lot easier as those bloodsuckers who hunted within the forest typically went alone or in very small groups.
The hunting of blood dolls was not that difficult a task as they were quite new to their lust for blood. They typically would hunt radically and made quite a bit of noise, allowing a hunter such as himself to easily anticipate them. Vampires on the other hand presented quite a challenge. To hunt a large group consisting of more than three vampires is an impossible task, no matter how skilled the hunter. They moved a near blinding speed and were quite skilled in their craft. They barely made any noise and it required a keen eye to pick them out in the forest. If he did not hit a vampire on his initial strike he would not likely get a second chance.
In order to kill any vampire it required many things to go right. His weapons of choice consisted of a bow and a dagger, as a last resort if his first weapon failed him. Each weapon was dipped in a poison resin that would immobilize a vampire’s circulatory system, effectively paralyzing them. This would allow him to perform the laborious task of finishing off the creature. In order to kill a vampire it required him to cut up the creature into small portions and to burn each piece of the body till nothing remained. This was the only sure measure to kill them as with their special abilities it was quite possible one would have regeneration powers and they all possesses enhanced healing abilities. All this had been learned through experience and he would need those tools he had learned tonight in order to complete his task.
His moment of thought was quickly disrupted by the loud movement of what only could be a blood doll. He quickly followed the noise and surely enough found his prey for this evening. It was definitely a recently turned blood doll as its bloodlust was beyond belief. No control, only the savage thirst drawing him towards the humans that reside here. He quickly pulled out his bow and lined his sight. This would be an easy kill tonight.
Suddenly without warning he was distracted by a beauty he had never seen. It moved with a grace he had never seen before. Due to its speed thought he was certain it could only be one thing, a vampire. The vampire turned its head for an instance and he saw the glimpse of the most beautiful face he had ever seen. He knew she was a vampire but the face showed a humanistic innocence he had never seen in the creatures. This distraught him deeply, as it seemed to question everything he had grown up to believe in. These creatures were supposed to be no more than savages. How can so much innocence and beauty be in such a creature? Why am I drawn to her?
As she disappeared he was left with only questions, without answers that disturbed him deeply. It was also too late to return to the hunt as his prey had long been gone as he stood in his trance. This evening there would be no deaths at his hand.I think I saw the sun today,
I know I saw the rain.
I wonder will it
wash
away
the residue
of pain.
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 9:36 pm
I understand a picture, it is just that as for color I actually prefer my black text, and personally I have no real attachment to any fonts other than the standard. A picture I could easily do, I was just wondering what is wanted for roleplaying. Thank you for the tips though.
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