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A Rp in the Golden Sun universe 

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 08, 2010 10:16 pm


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Name: Riduro (Ree Doo ru)
Age: 18
Height: 5'8
Weight: 140
Element: Fire
class: warrior

Alignment: Unsure (Right now probably evil)

personality summary: Riduro is a mysterious person. She keeps most of her problems and stress to herself so she is a bit angry an has such a unapproachable aura. Her innocent act could warm any body heart so she can lead almost anybody in her trap

other notes: She is usually seen in blood and from prox

Bio abstract: Some people would call her a killing machine. Riduro was seen in the shadows as a kid hiding from what she called 'Nightmares' Though she lives alone with no family she has dreams of someone watching over her so she manages living alone.
Narrative Bio:
She brushed her unusually short, black hair. She fixed her skirt and tightened her ribbon. She stared at her emotionless face, Her dark aura reaching the whole mirror. Smirking evilly she skipped out of the house, bringing her scythe with her. She glanced at the people working on some sort of project.

She smiled at skipped over to them "What cha doing" She waved before smiling innocently. As they told her she nodded to every detail walking around the building. She grabs her scythe and slices a piece of wood at the bottom causing the building to fall. Most of the men got injured while the rest were killed. She giggles "OOps..." Smirking she skipped away from the scene and looked around the town Surprised on how the village was still plentiful. She sighs 'There has to be something bigger that This' She narrowed her eyes before smiling again and skipping back to her house.

She packs her essentials and some extra clothes. She leaves her house and looks at the gate. She had to admit she had a funny feeling at the bottom of her stomach "Eh? Ridoru your leaving" One of her 'Friends' Said, she quickly turned and nodded "Really?.....well its gonna be boring with out ya...good luck i guess" She says before walking away. The black haired girl merely smiled and nodded before breathing in and leaving.
Ridoru guess it was for the best.


Starting stats
Class: Warrior
Level 13

HP: 100
PP: 60
Attack: 60
Defense: 78
Agility: 35
Luck: 4

Djinn:

Heat -boost party defense
burn -Stuns a foe with an attack

Starting Psynergy:
Fire (6pp)
Flare wall (7pp)
Fireball (12pp)
Heatwave(6pp)
PostPosted: Fri Oct 08, 2010 11:50 pm


Hmm.. she seems kinda plain. She fits snugly in the 'psychotic murder girl' archetype without much differentiation, which, as far as I can tell so far, Karin, and potentially Flare if she ever does anything that makes sense, and at least initially Yami-Saiya all fall under already.

While it's tempting to consider a character from Prox with no motivations regarding Leonidas's razing of the town, it's also unrealistic, not to mention the event is absent completely from her bio. Her departure from her village is contrived and lacks meaning, giving her no aim or purpose.

I'm going to have to say try again, and send you back to the drawing/writing board. You'll need to come up with something with more depth. Ruthless, one dimensional murder girls, while popular, are not effective role play characters. If you want help, feel free to ask.

I think Riduro has good potential if you want to spin her as a 'mysterious' figure, like her namesake a riddle, but it'll take some work for that to really manifest in a way that will make for a good RP.

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 09, 2010 2:58 pm


I do believe it's been stated you are only allowed to start off with one djinn, unless I'm mistaken. Not trying to be rude, just trying to help.
PostPosted: Sat Oct 09, 2010 5:19 pm


Ah, yes, that is also true. We let a few antagonists get away with it, as they are also higher leveled and are supposed to have a slight lead on the protagonists in the beginning, however, Riduro is about the same level as the protagonists, and therefore is limited to one djinni.

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 09, 2010 6:57 pm


There is nothing entirely wrong with an archetype, if you can play it off right in a way that makes your character unique. Take example: Rayl. He falls under a stereotypical hero archetype right? Well that's how I started his profile...then insert some Don Quixote and Holden Caulfield/Catcher in the Rye and Viola! A emotionally shifting adolescent with visions of knighthood in a world of trains, guns (lest I mistake Mael's weapon), and psynergy.
PostPosted: Sat Oct 09, 2010 7:20 pm


I just don't think there's enough to differentiate from the mold, that's all.

Rayl has that differentiation you mentioned, he has these aspirations and personal goals and he struggles to decide/discover whether they are achievable or worth striving for.

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