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Squad 7 Captain Wolf 3.0 ~Ace Brigade Judging~

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Michael Bladebreaker

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 18, 2011 2:41 pm


Name: Wolf
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Occupation: Captain of Squad Seven, Drunkard, Merrymaker

Specialty: Physical Battle, Drinking

Zanpakuto's Name: Lann (Irish word for Blade)
Note: As a result from being in multiple comas, Wolf is now constantly in a state of Shikai release, because he has lost partial control of his Spiritual Pressure. Not bad, for him, because it makes it a bit easier for Hollows to find him.

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Shikai/Special Ability 1: Lann melds with Wolf's body, leaving him with claws and fur on his hands and feet, and speed about twice as fast as normal.

Shikai/Special Ability 2: Howl - Anything in a 500 foot radius from Wolf is stunned. Stun Time based on Rank or Distance.
Captains - 0-249 Feet - 2 Posts. 250-500 Feet - 1 Post.
Lts. - 0-249 Feet - 3 Posts. 250-500 Feet - 2 Posts.
Officers - 0-249 Feet - 4 Posts. 250-500 Feet - 3 Posts.
Soldiers - 4 Posts, No Matter the Distance.

Shikai/Special Ability 3: Bloodrage - Wolf's eyes turn blood red, and he goes into a killing frenzy towards anything near him. This lasts for 6 posts. It is not an invulnerability, and he attacks anything with a pulse nearby, be they friend or foe.

Bankai Call: Answer the call of the Clan! Slash, Lann!

Bankai: Wolf's body becomes covered in fur, horns grow on his shoulders and head, and wings unfold from his back. The wings cannot be used to fly. The horns and wings can be used to attack, but most of the time, they are not.
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Bankai Technique 1: Rush - On all fours, Wolf dashes at speeds faster than the normal human eye can see towards the opponent, and jumps at them to attack.

Bankai Technique 2: Whirlwind - After using Rush, Wolf can divert from the jump to the side, to spin on his back at high speeds. During this attack, the horns, wings, and claws are utilized to attack the opponent.

~Ranked Kido Setting~
Having never been too keen on Kido, Wolf only knows how to use Breaking Palm, yet has mastered it to it near being as normal of a strike as any. In Normal/Shikai form, the power of Breaking Palm is devastating enough. In Bankai, however, the skill, power, and speed of this powerhouse of a spell is increased tenfold.


History: He's a well known Shinigami in the Soul Society, and a very outgoing lad, but when it comes to combat, he's loyal, and fierce. His history has essentially been wiped from the records because he's been in multiple comas, and has been taken care of by Iris, the nurse from Squad 4, for years this time. Many believed he would not wake up, but here he is, standing like it's only been a couple of days... His first thing to do? Find out where they moved the taco stand.
PostPosted: Mon Apr 18, 2011 2:47 pm


I will judge this

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Ace Brigade

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 18, 2011 7:07 pm


Mike I will stab your face in mister, PM so we can talk
PostPosted: Tue Apr 19, 2011 11:34 pm


After reading this over and over again there were things that is wrong with this RPC some are personal thoughts and others not personal thoughts so lets start off with factual things that is not personal.

Factual:

1. "Shikai/Special Ability 1: Lann melds with Wolf's body, leaving him with claws and fur on his hands and feet, and speed about twice as fast as normal." This is more of a Arrancar attack than a Shinigami attack, the side effect of your speed becoming faster is ok but the fact that your zanpakuto melds with your body and you go under a transformation that right there is what makes it a Arrancar move and not Shinigami. Remember the difference between a Arrancar and Shinigami zanpakuto is that a Shinigami's zanpakuto is only an extension of their body that is why their is a Spirit in their blade and an Arrancar's zanpakuto is actually their body part not an extension that is why there is no Spirit in their blade. So this attack right here is a big "NO NO"

2. "Shikai/Special Ability 2: Howl - Anything in a 500 foot radius from Wolf is stunned. Stun Time based on Rank or Distance.
Captains - 0-249 Feet - 2 Posts. 250-500 Feet - 1 Post.
Lts. - 0-249 Feet - 3 Posts. 250-500 Feet - 2 Posts.
Officers - 0-249 Feet - 4 Posts. 250-500 Feet - 3 Posts.
Soldiers - 4 Posts, No Matter the Distance."
This attack is a big NO NO for two main reasons, first reason is that this is a shikai move that range is way to big for a shikai attack maybe if it was only up to 50 foot radius then it would be ok. Second reason is that stunning and paralyzing is to strong for side effects because it completely immobilizes meaning that anyone can instant kill that stunned or paralyze person, maybe if you would of said stunned for a few seconds then that would of been fine because stun is only works for a moment anyway it is the weaker form of paralyze that can last for hours or even days that is why even having a paralyzing effect should be limited to only a minute no more or no less.

3. "Shikai/Special Ability 3: Bloodrage - Wolf's eyes turn blood red, and he goes into a killing frenzy towards anything near him. This lasts for 6 posts. It is not an invulnerability, and he attacks anything with a pulse nearby, be they friend or foe." There is only one problem here and that problem is that you go into a uncontrollable bloodrage. Within the 6 post if a person is already to helpless to fight and you are alone with the person you are force to kill because no one is there to stop you and that is breaking one of the guild rules killing a person without having their consent.

4. "Bankai: Wolf's body becomes covered in fur, horns grow on his shoulders and head, and wings unfold from his back. The wings cannot be used to fly. The horns and wings can be used to attack, but most of the time, they are not." Yet again like I said before this more of an Arrancar thing than Shinigami, this seems more like an Reserreccion than a Bankai so this is a big NO NO.

5. Both your Bankai attacks is a big NO NO just for the simple fact that both need to have your Bankai ability in ordered to be preformed.

Personal:

To get to the point of my personal feelings is that this RPC I can't see as a Captain level, this RPC can be tenfolds better than what it is right now. I get and can see that you want an RPC that is based off a wolf or even an uncontrollable wolf even though it is hard for some to make that happen but there is still other ways to have the RPC that you want that still follows the basics of what a Shinigami is. These are the reasons why this RPC can't be accepted.

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