i dont usually deal with profiles so i am gjust going to tell you what i see as wrong, then zibraz will go through it all again.
1) i would like you to use this skeleton, changge the size so it is normal when you do it.
Bandani Zaki
[align=center][size=18][b][color=green]This is the profile skeleton. You must use the information provided in this post but you can add more if you feel the need. Please take your time with naming your character as we have taken alot of thought as to what to put into the skeleton[/color][/b][/size][/align]
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[align=center][color=blue][b]Name:[/b][/color] (Obvious)
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[color=blue][b]Age: [/b][/color](Your appearance age, not your actually are. Shinigami can appear to be 30 but are actually well over 10000 years old)
[color=blue][b]Squad:[/b][/color] (Do I need to say)
[color=blue][b]Seat:[/b][/color] (Again, your rank in your squad)
[color=blue][b]Appearance:[/b][/color] (What your character looks like. You can provide a picture but we also wants words. A picture would be nice as it provides a perspective. As what you can put in, what clothes does he usually wear. Colour hair? Height, weight, eye colour. Does s/he have any scars, is there anything different about him than normal people).
[color=blue][b]Trinkets: [/b][/color](This simply means, does your character have anything he carries around with him all the time. Such as a sake bottle, a little knife, a teddy bear, etc).
[color=blue][b]Personality:[/b][/color] (What is your character like? Is he kind, sleepy, boring. Does anything make him angry, etc. This also needs to includes his likes and dislikes).
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto's Name:[/b][/color] (Do I need to explain?)
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto Appearance[/b][/color][color=brown][Sealed][/color]: (What does it look like when it is sealed? What colour is it. How long, think, etc is it. Also what about it's sheath? You can post a profile picture up here aswel if you want).
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto Appearance[/b][/color][color=brown][Release Shikai][/color]: (This is just your Shikai's appearance, you can post a picture if you want)
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto Ability:[/b] [/color][color=brown][Released Shikai][/color]: (This is simply it's ability. Simple as it says, if you need any help to figure an ability out, ask someone else, we will be happy to give you ideas. Also state if you have achieved it or not. It must have some form of weakness.)
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto Appearance[/b][/color] [color=brown][Bankai][/color]: (This is what your Bankai looks like)
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto Ability[/b][/color][color=brown] [Bankai][/color]: (This is where your ultimate ability comes in. What can it do? How does it make you better? It cannot be invincible, you must have weaknesses, you don't have to post up the weaknesses but you must know the weaknesses and if someone uses that weakness you must accept it)
[color=blue][b]Zanpakuto Spirit:[/b][/color]: (This simply adds more charisma to your character and adds greater depth. We may have a story arc involving these so please add them)
[color=blue][b]Kidou:[/b][/color] (Are you good at Kidou, what number Kidous do you know. Everyone is granted Kidou 1-10 when they start off (Unless your in squad 11) you must train for all other Kidous)
[color=blue][b]History:[/b][/color] (This is what happened when your character was live (Not a Shinigami), also what might have happened when he was in the Soul Society. It doesn't have to be detailed but we must know some things).[/align]
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2) I would like you to only use 1 profile picture, so it does not clutter up your profile too much.
3) you only have 1 power, you have not explained it, and from what i have read its going to be fairly useless if you fight anything other than something hollow based.
4) in my opinion your history doesn't make much sense, you can keep it but I would recommend reading through it
so in short your profile is nowhere near done, sorry. i cannot permit this profile to be usable at the moment, the skeleton will give you basically what you need to lengthen it, also i would like you to tell me if you have role-played in bleach before, if not then we will set some form of training up for you to improve and for you to gain confidence, allot of the time it takes a while for someone to figure out their character so I recommend using the character, but first i need your profile completed.
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