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 Posted: Mon May 08, 2006 12:53 pm
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Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 11:09 am
So I meant to make comments before but I fell asleep... heh, that tends to happen a lot it seems, that I fall asleep before doing things I meant to do.
Anyway, I'm very interested to see where this is going, partly because relationships across species and the consequences of such are intriguing to me, and partly because I want to see where the Jolly RP influences are. The "Remember, remember" did not escape me, of course. I like how I already know Leon and now we're seeing him from a different perspective--that of his own people. Clearly he's a big deal not only in the Jolly world. Question, though, why do they call him Leon among his own people as well? Is he purposely trying to keep his real name a secret?
One final thing: you're doing very well with the language issues. I see so few mistakes that if I didn't know any better I would never guess that English isn't your first language. Nice work.
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Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 3:37 pm
Seabhac So I meant to make comments before but I fell asleep... heh, that tends to happen a lot it seems, that I fall asleep before doing things I meant to do. Anyway, I'm very interested to see where this is going, partly because relationships across species and the consequences of such are intriguing to me, and partly because I want to see where the Jolly RP influences are. The "Remember, remember" did not escape me, of course. I like how I already know Leon and now we're seeing him from a different perspective--that of his own people. Clearly he's a big deal not only in the Jolly world. Question, though, why do they call him Leon among his own people as well? Is he purposely trying to keep his real name a secret? One final thing: you're doing very well with the language issues. I see so few mistakes that if I didn't know any better I would never guess that English isn't your first language. Nice work.
Leon is the translation of his name into human language, and because it's easier for English speaking people to understand I used it in this draft that I have written in English for you guys smile
Oh... I'd be really interested to hear your opinion about Redwing, eventhough you haven't seen much of him yet, but I am still curious!
And thanks for the compliment about my language skills that makes me really glad ^_^
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Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 5:30 pm
I like it. I read part one and two and I like the way they are narrated.
The story is very strong and isn't the typical fan-fic with a lot of main characters of the principal story jumping for here and there.
And for sure, you're english is really good for no be your mother tongue. Better than mine for sure razz
I want to write a lot of things, a lot of stories in English but I haven't the skills with english necesary to that.
In short, I like it and I'll read more if you write it ^^
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