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 Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 12:41 pm
Ok here's the deal, this is a poetry thread, (for those of you who haven't guessed by the title) and we want you to post your best poetic material!
Alrighty then, Let the Games Begin!
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Posted: Sat Oct 28, 2006 3:47 pm
I like writing poetry, but I'm not really confident enough to share very much of it.
I submitted a poem to my school's literary magazine and it got in, so I think I would feel up to sharing that one.
It's not very clear, so I'd like to improve it, but it's written about my best friend's struggle with anorexia when we were freshmen.
Clarity
your sides
are defined
by lines and thighs
and fine, golden hair
but I have seen you
looking gaunt
and gray
and on those thin days
your lines were blurred
and
barely there
I tried to keep it simple in order to express my helplessness and lack of undersatnding in the situation. The speaker of the poem is meant to sound very passive, like they're speaking to someone who will never hear them. And I worked on choosing sort of sharp words, to mimick the cold days of winter and harsh realities of her problem.
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Posted: Thu Nov 02, 2006 8:22 pm
Very beautiful poem heart
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:53 pm
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Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 8:42 am
You should share more, its very good ^_^
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Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 7:40 pm
I'll think about it.
I'm really, really excited because I found a local zine last week at a coffee shop, and I think I'm going to send some stuff in to it (:
I've been looking for something like that forever.
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Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 3:53 pm
You really should post more heart
And I hope they publish some of your poetry. I would be shocked if they didnt surprised
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Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 10:03 am
Wonderful poem. =]
And good luck, I hope the accept all your poems. =D
I'll try to find one of mine and post it. 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 10:05 pm
More people need to post poems D:
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Posted: Thu Nov 23, 2006 6:58 pm
I wrote this about a year ago.
Your Last
Let the blood fall down like rain,
never wash it away again,
shattered glass lays like snow,
touch it and you'll know,
this is where it all shows,
this is the path you chose,
break down in sadness; take it in,
let loose your wrath; your last sin,
tell me nothing; I want the end,
this is the last message you will send,
this is the collection of broken hearted dreams,
our sanity unraveling at the seams,
what am I to be,
this is all I see,
break down in sadnss; take it in,
let loose your wrath; your last sin,
you'll die anyway,
so I have this to say;
tell me nothing; I want the end,
this is the last message you will send,
I have one more message I need to say,
this is it; it's your last day.
----------------------- End Poem -----------------------------
Now that I see it again, I start to think I don't like it anymore. sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Nov 23, 2006 7:26 pm
I don't know if it fits into the poems section, but I thought this was cute.
Why do you intentionally try to hurt me with your words?
Why are your eyes always so cold and full of bitterness?
Why are your hands so rough when you touch me?
Why do you feel that you always need to hurt me...?
Why do you look at me the way you do at school?
Why do you treat me as if I'm a toy that won't break?
Why do you always kiss me when you're happy...?
Why do you always hit me when you're angry...?
Why do you cry on my shoulder when you're sad...?
Why have you never said "I love you, my dearest."?
Why do you need me when you could have someone else?
Would you even miss me if I went away forever...?
Would you hold me in your arms if I was scared...?
Would you comfort me forever if I was going to die...?
Would you stop me from taking that step of the edge...?
Would you kiss away all of my tears when I cried...?
Would you rest with me after we have made love...?
Can I hold you when you're sad and comfort you...?
Can you smile your angelic smile just once for me...?
Can you whisper sweet things in my ear at supper...?
Can you hug me when I see you at the end of a long day?
One more question, my love...Why do you do these things?
My answer to all of those questions is LOVE.
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Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 12:46 pm
:]
Let me stand; breathe
In order to ease this pain
I untangle webs; shatter
To bleed secrets and explain
The conclusion of this agression,
The sequel of this demise.
Let it be a complete surprise[.]
I wrote it a few days ago. It's
also in mai siggy. Yawr.
XB
Be as mean as you want, please. whee
C&C
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r3veRse[Psych0]loGy`Pix!e
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Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 1:51 pm
You want to know me?
You want to know what lies beneath
Beneath my fragile outer shell
Is my soul peaceful like Heaven
or Darker than Hell?
If you truly wish to know
Stare into the pit of my soul
Does it shine like diamond
or is it dirty like coal?
Am I what you imagined inside and out
or have I left you with a sense of doubt?
I haven't done poetry since I was twelve...sorry if I'm bad at it.
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Posted: Thu Nov 30, 2006 9:58 pm
It's an old poem I did when I was young. It's not perfect either. My cousin wants to turn it into a song...>>
Bliss
Those days long ago, you left me there
there standing in the bitter cold snow
Didn't you hear my heart beating
It felt as if my soul was fleeting
I held back my tears so you couldn't possibly
Know the feeling I had in my beating heart
There in the snow, I cursed my heart
I couldn't tell you my dreams
I just watched as we parted
At graduation time, I felt I needed to tell you
to tell you how much I truely cared for you
Would you accept my undying love
Would you end my pain with the slightests shove
Over the rail I would fall taking my feelings
my heart, my soul...taking them all
You surprised me like always
You smiled gently and spoke
"I've loved you this whole time."
My ears war warmed by your words.
"I've wanted to tell you for so long
For so long my heart has ached
ached at the thought of you
of someone else loving you."
I spoke my wors clearly.
You placed your hand on my chest.
"Your heart is beating so fast."
"It's only because of you." I confessed.
You held me in your arms and gave me the sweetest kiss.
I pray we can always have eachother for all time.
Living in this never ending bliss.
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Posted: Sun Dec 10, 2006 5:39 pm
I wrote this while feeling a tuft of infatuation and submission against my brow.
Free-verse, yeah, boom:
______________________________________________________//
A kalideoscope unfurls, decadent flares gracing
the gem-studded twilight; fireworks.
Cosmic rays streaking the formerly bare fabric
Sprinkle grains of fantasy 'cross the roots
The markings of our infinite hourglass.
Creationism versus pessimism for demise
Personal sandman drips upon my essence: ignavus.
The windows dilate and stretch into blackened slug trails,
though perception burns to mere ash
Escapism with a cause,
Deny me not this duet.
Vicarious communism - oh, idolatry...
A titter at the strung dance,
Dashes of admiration for the troubles.
Sandman, sandman, sandman!
I sleep only for your commad.
Sandman, sandman, sandman!
Comatose induced for your fletting image to becloud my retinas.
Be blessed, sandman. Prismless rainbows force communication.
___________________________________________________
\________________________________________________//
Feel free to tell me I suck, or that I rock, or not to tell me anything at all, chill'uns.
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