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I love both of them...they are pretty sad though! crying
I love how you used "harmony" so much...it could be such a pretty word, but also might have a hurting nature.

The first poem leaves more mystery from "after" 3nodding

I see absolutely no problem in this poem, except this part. I see a minor mistake, nothing really bad that would ruin the poem, but Forever and After, don't you think they could be on the same line? Or, if I might suggest, just removing after? The only thing after does is signal it might be an unfinished poem, or leave us questioning why the after is even in there. That is just a suggestion, if you'd like to leave it, you can. I'm not trying to sound rude or mean, so sorry if I am sweatdrop

Great poem though, it flowed nicely and you used the right words.



I found that I liked this one better. It flows even more nicely than the first, and I see pretty much no problem to it. Wonderful poem.