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 Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 6:32 pm
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Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 6:52 pm
that honestly was incredible!
my main point obviously is that you have a real talent for making characters interact. you not only write, but you put on a show inside your stories! i was compelled from the moment i began reading it to the last sentance.
i really enjoyed the harsh attack at the end. it was like a brick wall straight to the face that made you want to smack into it a few more times lol.
keep up the incredible work.
~michael~
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Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 7:03 pm
Why thank you! biggrin
If you here a loud pop, it's because my ego was a little too swollen. whee
Thank you so very much. ^~^
I seriously didn't have any typos or anything? XD I'm usually typo queen.
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Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 11:12 pm
Wowza. I started reading and I kept reading. I liked it a whole bunch! Im not much of a critique, but I can say keep writin'!
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 1:24 pm
Thank you! I'm very glad you liked it. ^.^
Hehe, I will!
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 2:38 pm
I liked the beginning part. Things that start off with people talking make me want to read it, find out who is talking and whatnot.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 6:31 pm
Thanks! That's definitely a good thing, because nearly all of my stories start like that. (Both on the finished draft and in my head.)
It's funny. I was waiting for my computer to give me my internet and playing solitare, and all of a sudden that conversation floated into my head, so I let it go a bit, then figured I ought to write it down.
I'm almost glad my computer makes me wait about 15 minutes until my internet pops up.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 6:41 pm
xD Thats exaclty how most of my stories and such come up. Like in my first story I was just sitting there and the scene of the toast and Valcus barging into the church played in my head.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 6:58 pm
Yeah, it's always those intriguing scenes that just pop up so randomly, and you just have to find out what the heck is going on. *nods*
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 9:39 am
This was great! I loved it! And, yeah, my ideas come like that, too. The idea for Ayame: Blood of a Vampire, a book I'm writing, came to me while I was eating teriyaki ramen (yum!) and drawing my friend Ali. I have no idea where it came from, it just popped into my head and I wanted to know what happened next!
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 9:54 am
I like ramen! Thought ive never had the teriyaki before, just the chicken.
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 10:28 am
Teriyaki is my favorite! It's really good, and so is oriental. My mom always buys me chicken ramen since that's the only type you can in buy in bulk, and I love chicken ramen too. THe only type of ramen I don't like is Top Ramen (brand, they're nasty) and Shrimp ramen. I love shrimp, but shrimp ramen does NOT taste good.
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 2:33 pm
xD Ill keep that in mind. And were do you shop? At Sams you can get, I think, the chicken, beef, and shrimp in bulk.
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 8:11 pm
Yum, ramen is one of my favorite foods. XD I personally love the chicken-but I don't get it in the bulk packages-I buy the Maruchan Yakisoba kind. I don't have to make it on a stove that way.
Eck, shrimp ramen. That stuff just doesn't taste right.
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