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Sarah_aka_Hawah

PostPosted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 8:55 pm


Here's what I jotted down earlier today in an attempt to actually start writing a book:

THE GROUP

"My name is Tiffany and I want to join the group because I'm tired of feeling like a complete failure in life. I'm 24 years old, really fat, barely managing to keep going at work and in my relationship with my boyfriend, and my house is always a mess. It seems like I never have time for my friends and family and I haven't gone to church in years. I feel like I never manage to do anything right. There has to be something more to life than this!"

Tiffany clicks the Send button while wiping away tears, hoping that somehow the support of others in the group will help her to find answers to some of the problems that plagued her. She's tried so many things to get herself to be more, better, happier, stronger, prettier...all of the things that society tells her she should be...and nothing has worked. She's running very low on hope. Idly she browses the internet, looking at news sites, checking her email, and searching for the perfect recipe for crème brûlée. Her boyfriend once jokingly told her that he would marry her if she learned how to make creme brulee the way he likes it, but so far her efforts have failed to inspire a proposal.

"Better luck next time," she thinks to herself.

As if her thoughts of him had called him to her, her boyfriend Steve appears in the doorway to the computer room and asks "So, what's for dinner?" Her eyes dart to the clock on the computer and then cloud up as she realizes she has once again wasted all of her free time on nonsense and now has to begin the dreaded evening chores. Cooking, cleaning, feeding the cats, laundry, and keeping her boyfriend happy are chores that she seems to spend her life on and yet she never seems to accomplish much. Although, given the generosity of her waistline, it could be argued that at least the cooking is accomplishing something, though that's certainly not what she's trying to accomplish. She can never get the house clean enough to feel comfortable when guests arrive, and the piles of laundry are so deep that they make one wonder what might be found under them if they were ever to be moved. Jimmy Hoffa? Waldo? Or perhaps Kilroy? As for keeping her boyfriend happy, his mood swings seem to have so little connection to her behavior that she finds it impossible to accurately predict how he will respond to her. On some days he'll be sensitive and charming, attentive, forgiving, and eager to please, and on other days he only seems vaguely aware of her existence, and only then as the transportation system for his favorite piece of her anatomy.

Dodging Steve's hand as he reaches out, yet again, to pinch her butt, Tiffany goes into the kitchen to see what she can scrounge up for dinner. Veggie burgers? A box of noodles with some creamy parmesan cheese sauce with a couple of polish sausages and a bit of broccoli? Or...

"How about some of that fantastic beef stew you make?" Steve says, interrupting her thoughts with a most un-welcome suggestion. Beef stew takes a long time to make, and she'd have to chop so many vegetables! That's definitely not what Tiffany had in mind for tonight.

"I'll make beef stew on Saturday," Tiffany says. "How about beef patties with onions, green beans, and some stuffing mix? Will that do for tonight?"

Not really waiting for Steve's reply, Tiffany begins pulling out the necessary ingredients. Sighing, she realizes that the kitchen is a mess and she'll spend half of her cooking time shuffling dirty dishes from one part of the kitchen to another part just to get them out of her way. The condition of the kitchen is yet another reminder of her incompetence, and she sinks deeper into her depression. Mechanically, she goes about preparing dinner, hoping that Steve won't look at her closely enough to see the expression on her face and ask questions she'd really rather not try to answer. Sometimes it's just so hard to try to explain why she feels terrible, especially when the reason has been the same for so long and he thinks she ought to either get over it or just fix the problem. She wishes she could just fix the problem, but she doesn't know how! She often wonders if she is the problem...

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Several hours later and a few time zones ahead, Susan cuddles up with her laptop to check her email and see what to expect from the weather for the coming weekend. She likes to keep herself busy, so she usually does more than one thing at the same time. At the moment, she's also brushing her dog, a fluffy red pomerainian named Francine, and drinking a cup of hot chocolate while having a casual conversation with her husband and two children who are still finishing their breakfast. Susan doesn't "work," per se, but taking care of the kids and the dog and the house and her husband while acting as owner and moderator of an online chat forum takes pretty much all of her available time and energy. She fits in a daily walk with the dog for exercise and does art projects with the kids for fun, but her true just-for-me activity is her online group. She started the group two years ago after realizing that she needed more adult conversation than she was getting through her other activities. She'd popped into chat rooms now and then and made several good friends, but she was shocked by how many people online were literally begging for help with their problems. She'd majored in psychology before the children were born, and somehow it just made sense to her to start a group online where people could come to share their problems and solutions.

Once she'd made up her mind to do it, she'd jumped into the project wholeheartedly. It was a bit of a struggle, at first, to get enough activity among the members of the group to keep it alive and self-sustaining, but for the past few months she'd seen her online "baby" grow into a thing of beauty. People from all around the world and a variety of backgrounds come to her group to support and be supported. She could do without the "trolls," though. She could never understand why some of the neediest, most troubled people who come to her group are the ones who insist on disrupting it and threatening to destroy it with their deceitful and inflammatory posts. Why, for example, would someone pretend to be a pregnant teenager who was molested and impregnated by her father and then kicked out of her home by her mother when the pregnancy became obvious? And the person who claimed to be a member of the KKK had done immense damage to the group with his hateful messages before he finally moved on to wreak havoc on someone else's group.
PostPosted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 6:40 am


I do like it. [= My favorite line had to be "His favorite part of her anatomy" [or however it went, too lazy to scroll down. D;] you've already managed to convey Tiffany's desperation and Susan's warmpth. They do seem like characters you want to know.

The only thing that really bugs me is Tiffany's email. I've had some bad experiences with depressed people online, *cough* and they usually use ellipses and misspell a lot of words, even if it's as simple as writing "I'veg ot to hav eit" or something.

I'm going to predict that Tiffany's going to dump her boyfriend? And he'll stalk her? xD


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Queenie Rae


Sarah_aka_Hawah

PostPosted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:20 am


I'm planning on creating several characters who are part of The Group, and each one will have to have a unique writing style. I'm not going to worry about creating the writing style at this point, though, since that's something I can put in once I have the basic content and storyline created. It will probably be the first major revision, if I ever get that far. razz

As for what will happen to each of the characters, such as Tiffany...I honestly have no idea at this point! LOL I haven't created any kind of plot or outline for how I want the story to go. I am pretty much just writing it down as I think it up...or thinking it up as I write it down. I don't think that's the way a professional writer writes, but it's the way I write.

I don't think Tiffany's boyfriend will physically hurt her in any way, but I do think he'll cheat on her. Maybe. Or maybe he'll just walk out on her. Not sure. Tiffany's problems are mostly internal, not something that comes from what others do to her. I'll have a different character that is being abused in some way. Another character will have children she just can't handle. Another one will be a young character whose parents are too busy for her and whose siblings are a bit crazy and not particularly nice to her. I'll probably throw in a character who is pregnant and planning on placing the baby for adoption. And maybe a little old lady character, one who is disabled and living alone and can't do much but watch TV, talk on the phone, and get on the computer to chat with people.

The book will be about their lives and what brings each of them to The Group. It will also have at least one of the characters joining a different group that isn't supportive and has flame wars all the time and is full of bitter people and people just in there to make fun of others. I think I want the book to show the difference between a group that is helpful to those who join it and a group that was started with good intentions but ended up being worthless because of the attitudes of those who joined and poor moderation.
PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 12:04 pm


[Sorry that I didn't reply yesterday. I was going to, but something personal came up. D:]

See, I know that you said that you aren't going to create the writing style now, but the thing is, when someone's sad, they type differently. I type in a completely different way when I'm sad. Most of the people I know do, too... and the others I just haven't spoken to online when they're depressed. >_>;;

Here's too hoping for the first revision. xD <3

I'm actually like that, too. I usually have the story mapped out in my head, with some bits missing, but it ends up different when I type it. If I have something I MUST include, it ends up bad. D; So outlines are usually out for me, except for essays for English, which end up satirical anyway. [=

Oooh, you should add a character who's story is so unbelievable, they think she/he is a troll. =D[/size]

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Queenie Rae


Sarah_aka_Hawah

PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 12:18 pm


Le Queen


Oooh, you should add a character who's story is so unbelievable, they think she/he is a troll. =D


pirate


hehehe What story about an online group would be complete without a troll character! Good idea! Thanks. smile
PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 5:05 pm


Heh. xD No problem. But I was thinking that maybe they weren't a troll? o_O; Or maybe home life is so bad, all they can do is troll to 'feel better'. xD;;

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Queenie Rae


Sarah_aka_Hawah

PostPosted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 10:43 am


Le Queen
Heh. xD No problem. But I was thinking that maybe they weren't a troll? o_O; Or maybe home life is so bad, all they can do is troll to 'feel better'. xD;;

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I'm not sure I can create a convincing troll character, though I can show what troll behavior looks like in The Group. I have a tough time understanding why anyone would behave the way trolls do, so I'm not sure that any reason I might use will be convincing. Also, I don't really want the book to turn into a "Trolls are people, too. Let's feel sorry for the trolls," story. I don't have much sympathy for trolls, so I'd be more likely to make the troll character the "villain" of the story. smile

I could have a character be accused of trolling after the other members are made ultra-sensitive by a series of troll attacks...
PostPosted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 4:33 am


Yes, yes, that's what I mean, the last part. =D That could be a fun, dramatic part to read/write about...

And trolls really should be the villains. =O If you want to, you can go into the GD and do research? I'm not saying anything bad about the GD, just that they have a lot of trolls there. xD;;;

I think trolls troll because it's the internet, and they can put people down without being beaten up, like irl... Truthfully, most need just as much help as the people in the group do. Or so I understand. D:


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Queenie Rae

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