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 Posted: Wed Jun 13, 2007 10:07 am
Thump,Thump.
My heart fluttering lightly in my ears.
Blood racing through every vessel in my body.
Heat rising to my body...smiling.
He entered the room.
My eyes seemed to have signaled passion to him.
He turned and smiled a seductive smile.
My heart was now trying to beat itself out of my chest.
And he advanced towards me and looked deep into my eyes.
Drinking in the sight,drunk off of the passion the emminated from me.
I became dizzy from the passion....
And then I awoke.
It was a whispering dream of what I longed for.
The moonlight spilled from the tall glass window.
Tears spilled from my eyes
A scarlet figure walked forward and sat next to me.
Him.
I sighed with sorrowful passion.
How I longed for him...since his passing.
How he layed there in blissful peace...alone.
I wanted to be with him.
I wanted our love to last...even from beyond.
His scarlet silhouette hand brushed my face and I sighed.
"Fly with me" he said.
"Yes,Yes.I will," I said without hesitation.
He kissed me adn slipped the dagger he had through my heart,I smiled.
The scarlet liquid pouring through the night dress.
I now stood beside my love.
Holding his silhouetted hand paing through the night as one again.
As whole again.
I slipped with him into the other side.
I am whole again.
And the scarlet blood still pouring through the night dress.
My body laying there cold.
Sun rose adn I looked below from where I "lived".
Those who shed a tear for my loss.
Laying me next to my love.
We lay in blissful peace...together.
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 5:43 pm
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Posted: Fri Jun 22, 2007 7:46 pm
=| I liked it, in the beginning.
I mean, I loved it, but, the ending was a bit of a dissappointment, it was really good, though.
=]
There are errors that can be easily fixed - grammer wise, I mean.
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Posted: Sat Jun 23, 2007 7:52 am
3nodding thank you.....yeah I thought it was but I always wanted to just kinda let the ending be more relaxed lol.
Yes I shall be doing some editing in the future.... sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Jun 23, 2007 4:53 pm
It's sad. At first I thought he was going to be a vampire.
It could have been better, but was still nice.
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